很多同学们在雅思写作考试中总是倾向于用更多的语句进行内容的表达，写得越多越可能拿到高分。事实上，大量语句辞藻的堆砌反而影响到考官的阅读，显得杂乱无章，让人找不到作文的表达主旨。在雅思写作考试中，语言简洁明炼是非常重要的。下面A加未来小编就带大家分析各位考生在雅思写作考试中的常见问题。
一：重复的毛病
所谓重复，是指同样的意思在句中有两个低分反复表示出来。这时就该删去一个。
下面举2个例子说明一下。
例1：Sales rose rapidly from February up to June but were unchanged from June to October.
动词rose意思为【上升】，一定是向【上】走，所以后面的up一字就是重复，会伤害简洁性。应该把up删掉，成为：Sales rose rapidly from February to June but were unchanged from June to October.
下面这个句子也有类似的毛病：
例2：You must be at least 18 years old or above to be eligible to vote.
【至少】(at least)和【以上】(above)表示的观念是重复的，应该选择以删去，成为：You must be at least 18 years old to be eligible to vote.
或是You must be 18 years old or above to be eligible to vote.
二：累赘的毛病
句中如有空洞的字眼，就是累赘，也会有失简洁。以例3和例4来说明
例3：Patience is generally considered to be an essential quality in a teacher.
句中的to be an essential quality是主词补语，用来修饰主次patience，然而其中的to be没有什么意义，省略它也不会影响句意。
剩下来的an essential quality仍可做主语补语，成为：Patience is generally considered an essential quality in a teacher.
其实，consider后面的to be都可以省略，不会影响句型，也不会改变句意。从修辞的角度来说，这个位置的to be就是累赘的字眼，应该删掉以求简洁。
例4：Most doctors agree that smoking makes a contribution to lung cancer.
句中的make a contribution to这种表达方式比较累赘，因为动词make是一个空洞的字眼。如果把contribution改成动词contribute，用来取代make，可以省下一个空洞的字眼，也加强了简洁性：Most doctors agree that smoking contributes to lung cancer.
有时候一个精确的字可以取代一长串的叙述。如例5
例5：The wonder of the Internet would have been unable to imagined a decade ago.
句中的unable to be imagined其实可以用一个字来取代，十分简洁：
The wonders of the Internet would have been unimaginable a decade ago.
可以用一个形容词单字表达清楚的，就不必动用到一个片语。如例6
例6：It Is much more difficult to clone an organism of a complex nature than it is to clonebacteria.
介词短语of complex nature修饰前面的organism，其中的nature是比较空洞的的字眼。如果省略不要，直接以complex来修饰organism会比较简洁。
It is much more difficult to clone a complex organism than it is to clone bacteria.
总结:简洁性是修辞的两大重要原则之一
不过它的重要性一般是居于清楚性之后。写文章时首先要顾虑是否清楚。
确定意思表达得够清楚之后，再来要求简洁。
写完文章后一定要再看一遍，挑出所有可以精简的低分表达。通常从用字句型两方面着手，就能剔除所有重复与累赘之处，让文章更精简。